Question

This poem is suppose to be a personification poem comparing but could anyone improve my poem or make it longer

The man walked across the ground waiting for the very found sound he waits and triumphs when it’s done for he had taken a flower gun the flower screams in pain and and fall petals revolving in metal bars

Answer 1

`beinggreat78~here~to~help~you!`

Your poem is amazing! One thing I would recommend changing is where it says fall petals. I think it should be petals fall.

~An honest opinion