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Which sentence should be revised to eliminate excessive wordiness??

Which sentence should be revised to eliminate excessive wordiness??-example-1

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Answer:

The first sentence is wordy, and should be revised.

My reasons:

1. A hurricane is a storm (common sense), there is no need to reiterate that.

2. An entrance to your house is a door (most of the time), there is no need to say "including the doors."

3. It would have been sufficient to just say "debris" and not "debris and other items"- because what other items?

Let me know if this helps!

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