Question

Everyone knows that water is important. Who doesn’t like to drink a cool glass of water after a long day? But some people don’t seem to worry about polluting the local water supply. They should! I like water, and so should everyone else.

What change would most improve this introductory paragraph?

providing additional examples of the importance of water
emphasizing further the foolishness of not caring about water
providing summary evidence of the bad impacts of water pollution
emphasizing that water pollution is as bad as air pollution

Answer 1

Firstly, if this is an opinionated essay or paper, it is fine to state "I like water, and so should everyone else". However, if it not... I would avoid this. Also, since it is an introductory paragraph, I would not use rhetorical questions. From what I understand, you are trying to convince people in this paper why water is important... I would remove the "they should!" statement because it is informal and very assertive to a reader.

Also, you do not want to state examples in your introduction. Your introduction should be short with emphasis placed on your topic.

Hope that helped!

Answer 2

Introductory paragraphs are what captures the readers' interest in reading your paragraph. It is the first thing that people read and introduces the idea of your paragraph.

In this case, to improve this introductory paragraph, the writer would need to provide additional examples of the importance of water to give emphasis to the idea that water is important.