This is great!
I am actually homeschooled myself and agree completely with your paper. Ok, so you use the word Home-schooled or Homeschooling. Maybe you can try a different phrase, such as:
Students who work from home.......
Those who are not a part of a brick and mortar school are able to .....
Another thing is i noticed that you have some pretty long sentences, so try to fit in a few comas in there or make the sentences shorter.