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Can someone please analyze my poem I wrote for my Girlfriend? We have been dating a while and this is the first poem I have ever written. And she is fascinated by the stars

The stars:

Out of the vast selection of stars
That line up so absolute in the night
I fine one star irregularly mislaid
Onestar so contrasting to the vast selection

I find myself short of breath and astonished
To discover something so alluring
Out of the vast selection of stars
I believe I have found my star.

Thank you so much!​

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User Gerb
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this was great tbh like idk what to fix

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User Mflodin
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This was beautiful . Absolutely beautiful . She will love it . :)

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User Econner
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