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Floating in the pool, Sarah saw a bee trying to dry its wings. What is the best way to revise this sentence?

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Answer:

While she was floating in the pool, Sarah saw a bee trying to dry its wings

Step-by-step explanation:

adding "While she was" at the beginning of the sentence tells the reader that Sarah was the one floating in the pool, whereas the original sentence doesn't clearly state whether it was Sarah or the bee who was in the pool.

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User Anthony Grist
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Well floating in the pool, Sarah saw a bee trying to dry its wings.
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User Qi Zhang
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