Question

Amanda is writing the thesis statement for a literary analysis essay. Her essay examines how a story set in a theme park influences the mood of the text. Read her thesis statement and answer the question that follows.

I will tell you how mood is developed through setting in the short story "Lend Me Your Ears."

What should Amanda most focus on when revising her thesis statement for formal language?

Answer 1

Amanda should focus on her use of first person pronouns.

Why?
A thesis is a formal statement clearly expressing the authors main point that is made in the passage. The use of personal pronouns diminishes the statements formality.