Question

Hello!! I need to tips on my roughly drafted poems.

Answer 1

Well, your poem is well-written and well-organized that there's no need of having a tip, but the poem needs to be a less depth-full as it will be very hard for others to understand

Answer 2

Wow, that was good. I'd put more rhyming words depending on the poem you want it to be, but all in all great work.