Question

Read the advertisement. Mr. Sparkle is a cleaning product. It cleans floors, walls, and countertops without damaging them. It does not cost very much. It is available at supermarkets. Which revision does the advertisement need?

Answer 1

No comma after walls. Redundant sentences I would combine 2 sentences and say “it’s cost effective and available at your local supermarket”. Hope that helps

Answer 2

The advertisement needs revision in the addition of adjectives and adverbs, the words used are not attractive to the reader or audience, the advertisement should include words as “special for all surfaces”, “no damage guarantee”, “Mr. Sparkle price is affordable”, “The product is safe in all surfaces”, among other that can be selected to make the product desirable for the buyer.