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Which of the phrases should be revised to improve parallel structure in the following sentence? While the priceless jewel was on display, the museum increased security, decided to extend the hours so more people could see it, and rearranged exhibits.

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"...decided to extend the hours so more people could see it..." This should be revised to be less informative, because the other sentences are not as informative.
Maybe revised to: "...the museum increased security, extended museum hours, and rearranged exhibits."
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