Question

Which revision best removes the informal language from this passage? (1) You should totally hire me to be your front desk receptionist at your veterinary clinic because I love animals. (2) Not only have I owned a wide array of pets, I have also volunteered for three years at the Crater Valley Animal Shelter. (3) This experience would allow me to help customers keep their animals calm and controlled while they wait for their appointments. A. There is no informal language, so no change is necessary. B. Change only sentence 1 to "I believe that I have the potential to succeed as a receptionist for your veterinary office because I love animals." C. Change only sentence 2 to "Not only have I owned a wide array of pets, I have also volunteered for two years at the Crater Valley Animal Shelter." D. Change only sentence 3 to "This experience would allow me to help customers keep their animals in an appropriate state of anticipation while awaiting their appointments."

Answer 1

I believe B is the correct answer.

Sentence 1 uses the word "totally" which isn't really appropriate for this type of writing.

Answer 2

The correct answer is B.

Step-by-step explanation:

Sentence number 1 should be replaced in order to remove the informal language from this passage since it contains the word "totally," which is an informal crutch used in oral language.