Question

I am writing an essay about my career and I need help with perfecting my introduction. “The career I chose to present this year was photography. As most people know photographers are professionals that focus on the art of photography with a digital or film camera. Photographers use artificial or natural lighting to snap pictures of various people, places and things in different settings.” Please help (hearting all)

Answer 1

You could add more about what a photographer does, it will add more to it and people will want to keep reading. Also don’t add too much because then that gives away the rest of the essay. Hopefully this is helpful

Answer 2

It's OK. U could write in more detail about what a photographer is and the definition